Gumball 3000
Gumball 3000 it is a race for rich people who they wanted another experience and spend her money crossing different cities in its luxury cars
The gumball borned in 1999,in Chicago and the race consist in be the first in the final line.
The race of 2008 began in London and it was finished in Berlin after a 6 days of crazy race.
The winner was Bo Brigthes with her Merceles SLK.
All the cars has a big sticker in the car with the name of Gumball 3000 and the autorities was knowed the cars and the racebut them can not did anything for closing the race.
The best of the race are the parties,becouse the most popular people go to this partys.
Next year i will ride wiht mi Seat 600 Tunning.
Do you want to be my Co-Pilot?
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Hi Borja
It's great you go on writing, because it helps you to improve. Don't think too much about the mistakes, but look at them to avoid repeating them.
By the way, "...for rich people who want..." in this case you don't need to write "they" because "who" is the subject, and the verb has to be in present because you are talking about the present.
"...and spend their..." you need that possessive pronoun.
"...in their luxury cars" you need "their" because you are talking about those rich people.
"gumball was born". Remember that we use the past of the verb "to be" and "born" after it. "the race consists of being". Don't forget the "s" of the third person singular and that we use the preposition "of" after the verb "consist" and after a preposition we need a gerund form (-ing).
"the 2008 race... and finished" you need the active form. "...after 6 days". Don't use the indefinite article "a" before 6, because it's plural.
"... with his Mercedes" it's a man.
"all the cars have..." the subject is plural, so the verb has to be plural too. "...and the authorities knew..." the verb has to be active and in the past.
"...they couldn't do..." you have to use the subject pronoun, because it is the subject and the modal verb in the past and after a modal verb we have to use always the infinitive form.
"...of the race was..." "...because..." "...the most popular people went..."
"next year, I'll run..."
You have improved a lot, but if you go on writing you will write better, so cheer up.
See you!
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